It's amazing how much more you can say in fewer words. There is certainly something magical about a woman's hair and a man's lips connecting, especially if she is a mythical sea creature.
love this passionate wave :)
Nice. I like that in your brevity you express much, yet leave much to the imagination. Good write!
The simile of the hair like the ocean, this one ripples with sensuality.. the 2AM title is such a brilliant one that becomes part of the poem..
Oh, this first image 'She had hair like the ocean,' and all details in the next lines - amazing!
Lovely!! The passion boils over!
that last line made my knees weak a bit.. hot!!
Wow! You've really captured the passion in few well-chosen words.
Very beautiful and enchanting
the visual comparison of her hair and ocean waves works perfectly & the last line...stunning.
Ha. Clever. K.
very sensual the taste of salt on one's lips..
no more words were needed to evoke the sensuality and vivid imagery. wonderful!
Compression--when it works, it is a bit of a miracle. Now I'm hearing lines from Memory Motel--'down on the waterfront/her hair/all drenched/in spray.." the image is wild, warm as a summer wave.
I like the description of hair like the ocean.Great title, too.
I sometimes pine for that salty taste of a fluid ocean of passion born of a nights adventure.
Oh this is sexy love it!mindlovemisery
Ah yes the waves know much about stirring up passion.Excellent
Whoosh. Very convincing waves and salt!
Beautiful! To me she is the sea and the spray is the hair which washes over the writer. I love it!